I really enjoy writing this poem which I titled The Celestial Stage.
It elicited very good review when I posted it on Poemhunter.com.
A Celestial Stage
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A grandiose theatre
stage our universe
The sky its backdrop,
The twinkling stars,
Its white angels
The Moon its alluring princess
And the Sun its master of ceremony
Honouring everything with a name
Giving each created a character and form
Pampering the windows of our souls
The lightnings and thunders
Are the drums and strobelights
Punctuating the climaxes and suspense
Of these celestial histronics
Raging through our heavens
And the cumulous clouds the scene parters
The gentle winds are to show directions
And the rains a bonus to calm
The audience's nerves and boost fertility
To beget flowers, greenery and everything lovable!
Comments by friends at Poemhunter.com:
Ben Gieske (8/26/2008 7:46:00 AM) Full of active and imaginative images feeding the senses and imagination. I like the ideas you create; ex., “the rains a bonus to calm” (very soothing) , and “Honouring everything with a name” (a great idea) .
Fred Babbin (8/23/2008 11:09:00 AM) Not my way of writing, but it's well done. I like it.
Penny Hemans (11/5/2007 3:55:00 AM) the contrast between our planet and the universe is superb john.. opens out a whole plethora of thoughts... xxxPenny
Cheryl Moyer (7/20/2007 10:55:00 AM) john - You paint a gorgeuos world indeed! I wish I could hang it on my wall like a Picasso! Check out my 'Birth bangs' sometime and see if you like it. thanks for this - Cheryl
Robert Howard (1/26/2007 9:13:00 AM) A lovely and gracious poem and a powerful affirmation of life. I love the driving metaphor of the universe as the greatest of all performances. It flows like beautiful music.
nn mn (6/16/2006 2:04:00 PM) Nicely woven - good optics.
Duncan Wyllie (4/14/2006 10:01:00 AM) Lovely imagery, colourful languge, thankyou for sharing your art, Love Duncan
Elya Thorn (1/2/2006 10:56:00 AM) Amazing imagery, 'Celestial stage' I never heard this word combiantion but now.... A very very good poem!
Gina PrettyBrownEyes (12/20/2005 3:50:00 PM) i love your descriptions and i like the idea of this poem. it was interesting
Chionh Zhe Wen (12/18/2005 7:19:00 AM) Very beautiful poem, I love it a lot
Wednesday, September 10, 2008
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